PLS check my tune - it aint finished! but i need advice

[Dj Steffan D]

right its my first production! and looking round at all the foriums this is the best place to get constructive critasism!

this is only a week old! like my produceing - so dont exspect much but i want to continue this as i feel it has potential!

please dont take notice of the letters of my name in this! its just so i know what it sounds like as an intro! my main i dea is to create a dub for an intro and one just the actuall tune!!

here is the link - i think ull have to paste in real player!

pnm://www.angelfire.com/music4/djsteffandaudio/intro.rm

once again thanks for looking and listing its much appreciated and all comments are welcome! especially the ones that will help this to improve!! thanx!

Dj Steffan D http://www.DjSteffanD.com

[DJ FRAMPSTER]

yes this is queit good for ure 1'st attempt m8 biig iit up.

Im sorry i aint say'n more jst bad time @ d mo

[cole-z]

thats heavy m8, especially for a first time. what programmes do you use then?

[Dj Steffan D]

i have fruity and soundforge!! thanks fo the comments lads!!

i am updateing that link later peeps!! so check it m8!!
cole - z i could give u more info about getting fruity over Msn bruv

PLS NB: THIS IS NO WHERE NEAR COMPLETION

djsteffand@hotmail.com

www.djsteffand.com

[lyonz]

yeah man
i think that $$$$s phatt
especially for a first!!
big it up

[Dj Steffan D]

cheers m8

wat u think it is missing ne 1?

[Dj Steffan D]

Updated the link to a few things i have added!

changed b line slightly

addeda few effects for the build up ( ie the hammer and the riseing sound - also the closed doors at the start)

what you think?

all comments welcome!!

Cheers!!

pnm://www.angelfire.com/music4/djsteffandaudio/intro.rm

take a while to load but will stream if pasted in realplayer :d cheers

[Top$ta]

this tune aint bad at all

the drums r nice very

i like the sfx and vocals 2

but that bline is weak in my opionion
it dont match the raceyness of ur drums

but heavy 4 a dubplate big up

[Acid-D]

at the beginin were the drums stop and start the gap sounds a bit rong to me but prob not to any 1 else. the draging bac sample lol i have that . but all good

[Dj Steffan D]

yes cheers m8!

i agree but im finding it hard to get a good bline with it#!! wat i might do is attemt several different version all with different b lines!!

then choose the best 1! some people say they would buy it if it wasnt an intro - but i only am 70% done so all good i say!

more comments welcome

[Dj Steffan D]

yer lol i have just updated the link!!!!

and that is what im have done!! i like the door slamming effect!! but dosnt go well with the actuall tune i think ill change that!!

cheers

[Dj Steffan D]

Bump this Beast!!

i have also updated the link

[Dj Steffan D]

bump this Gem

[DOES IT MATTER]

i thought it was ok....for a first time thing

the bass line is a bit weak.......drums are gd.......i preferd the start to the beginning