Vortex n Crisis. dis is my 1st eva chat. drop sum of ur lyrics n tell me wot u fink

MC Nemesis

Ay yo. been readin da lyrics on hear an vortex n crisis r da heaviest. Dis is da 1st chat i av eva dun so tell me wot u fink. an gimme advice.

Im a bidda bidda bad man, MC
Wots ma name they call me Rema-D
y do rude bwoys immatate me
is it coz i bowl round in ma C-A-P

U aint got nuttin on me Candy
Chattin my $$$$ on da M-I-C
I'll hit u harder than Mohammad Ali
Coz i float like a butterfly sting like a Bee

Im so deadlee, Like a Sniper
pon da mic 2 get da crowd Hyper
Lyrical Bad boy like MC Viper.

dats it so far but its work in progress by da way Candy is dis kid in our skool who finks he is a wkd mc.

gimme tips plz bredrins. on how 2 improve it. and advice on lyrics after da viper line will b appreciated big time. SAFE!

Keep it real. Thanx 2 all dat reply

SUPERSTAR SINISTA

tounge twisting is good...but not when your typin it on a forum!(bidda bidda)
but for you first lirick it is good


oh and someone is all ready called mc rema d

Frisky

its alrite for ur first time it sounds fine 2 me

MC Nemesis

Thanx sen n sinister. much appreciated. yea i kno i need anuva line on da sniper/hyper/viper bit. dats y i sed if n e one wants 2 help on da viper lyrics m8. i'll try an take ur advice in2 hand bre's. not bad for a first attempt though. ay!

Sen

Try and get creative with pacing and stuff...your structure's good (except for the sniper hyper viper one...you need one more line) - the rhymes and words you use are very common though - if you're going to use them, do something different with them.

Try and work on assonance - where the rhyming sounds are similar, but not the same - can sound heavy live...hard to get your head around at first though.

And as for Crisis and Vortex, did you never check my technique?

Prepare yourself.

I come lyrically loud like thunder
Bury dibby soundbwoys 6 feet under
Deepsix a don I'm the microphone wonder
Can't test the best when I rock the mic I'm the

One MC that can hype the crowd, see?
Mash up the venue, vibe is rowdy
Ladies and gentlemen gettin' bawdy
Keepin' it lovely, Keepin it lively

MC Nemesis

soz sen. ive checked sum of ur lyrics they r bad!!! i av a pretty good lyrical tounge an can spit da lyrics fast. jus find it hard create chats dat hit da heart

Sen

I guess that's where you and I differ...i sound like a joke, but can write well

Keep on practicing, cause it's all about your vocabulary and using the words creatively to be really known.

Bubbilicious

Oy ya na i'm new 2 diz n all!
rit a few chatz yer n dey alrite but like i am jus tryna improve ma standard!
eres onna dem... tell uz wot ya fink ?
B-U-B-B-I-L-I-C-I-O-U-S
A hectik mc u dont dare 2 tes
Cum in messy
leave in a mess
i'l get u a buzzin like bees in der nest
but diz mc aint no pest
cumin from da south east not west
bringin a sour flava like lemon zest
ma flows wil make u sweat, strip 2 ur vest
Laydee Bubbilicious iz da gal i suggest!

Chek da sussex laydeez site http://mysite.freeserve.com/sussex_laydees dont b 4gettin 2 tag da book plz!

Sen

nice one bubbilicious...some of the timing may be off when i say it, but it comes cross proper!

(things like "cuming from da south east not west" could be extended to "not from da west" to fit the beats better...but that's all about your flow)

Bubbilicious

Cheerz, yer spose...... u got n e more tips 4 me?
More chatz dat me n ma bredwin av rittin r on r site yer so chek dem if u wanna?
Derz also pix on der....Jus wanna say mosta ya r heavy!
X

MC Nemesis

ay yo got sum of ma crew round now. chatted ma 1st chat an it sounded pretty heavy. i use 2 chat like b-live's chats an stuff. dats how a got ma lyrical tounge. jus gotta get writin em now. keep da advice cuming blud. much appreciated. safe!

Bubbilicious

Erez nuvva 1 of ma chatz yer...it gos bit dodgy at da end + i jus started 2 fuk round but chek it n e way n c wot ya fink.

{Skyla iz ma bes mate btw parta da Sussex Laydees}

Bubbilicious + Skyla cummin on truly
rinsin da mic fully
sjockin out freely
spittin r lyrix speedily
sum brehs say dey b cheesy
but man dem say u gals plz me
we aint sketz, we aint e z
more complex dan 1-2-3
we decide who we wanna b
wot we wanna do
ppl say mc'ins dat fing 2 choose
Bubbilicious + Skyla, rhymin 2getha we aint gunna loose
in r chats we'l tel u da news
whoz shaggin who + on da booze
all a da problems uz teenz face
dese changin from place 2 place
Hastings town known 4 drugs
London aint shorta da thugs
In Romford ders all a da puff
ere bout boyz eatin da muff
and ovva stuff
we fink itz ruff
ratha NUFF LUV X

c wotta mean, stil goin on heavy tho innit?
feedbak?
SAFE X

KRYSIZ MC

Makin a tape already eh? Gwan son, DJ Bonafide???

MC Nemesis

Yea crisis. they dun loads of tapes but im on dis one. It was bad! yea DJ Bonafide. Up n Coming watch out.

MC Nemesis

Ay yo!!!!! Im startin work on ma site. And my chats r getting underway 2. gonna b a big month for da Rema-D. If n e 1 has n e ideas wot i can put on my site im all ears. soon as its up i will post da link. SAFE MA BREDRINS!!!!!!!!!

mc vortex

"Ay yo. been readin da lyrics on hear an vortex n crisis r da heaviest."

Im flattered

Its like this,

Take the tape out the case stick it in the system,
Play on the deck and feel da rhythem,
Bun up the weed and we be sippin on da juice,
Off the hook this $$$$ we boost,
We be chillin... in da bredrins yard,
3 toke killer dis $$$$ is hard,
Gotta keep it in gotta be spinnin,
Gotta pic up the mic n start rinsin


not very long but freestyle tings a gwan there blud.

MC Nemesis

yea yea vortex. safe bredrin. how long u been mc'in for. ive only been going bout 2 weeks now. i find it hard 2 create da lyrics blud. but can spit em out heavy!

mc vortex

been mcin about since last summer.

i aint to good wid lyrics but bro if u find it hard jus keep mcin before u go to bed, in school, when yur walkin down the street jus be freestylin n ull get better n keep readin! expand yur vocabulary.
trust i was worse than u when i started bro, jus practice.
wanna do a lil b2b now blud?

Bubbilicious

Can i try join in wit ya? I aint b2b'd b4 but wanna giv it a go.
If u dun wan me den fair nuff!