umm..... hi

FreakyP

heythis seems like its just hip hop/garage mcin

duz ne1 ere do ne mcin to dance music like house music and stuff i dont know if there is a difference in how its done but i could do with some help comin up wiv some rhymes i dnt mc clubs just for my m8s i usually freestyle but i wanna get some sick rhymes thought out i just dont know where to start this is probably the wrong area tho

thnx in advance

plz dont be a hater just coz im new

i dun wanna b hiphop/garage or nuttin n i aint into all dis battlin stuff i prefer goin back 2 back 2/3/4 mcs 2geva comin up wiv rhymes between em (sounds quality when we all freestylin) but i just run out of freestyle n wanna write some good stuff

i just need help turning inspiration into my own rhymes and where to just come up with stuff

EDIT!!!!!

ok so i wrote this its kinda deep n defo aint "gangster" and it will defo need work coz its the first thing ive ever written but here goes



people always say that lifes ok
but i turn around and everythin's just gray
i look in the mirror just guess what i see
i see life lookin back n its just ugly
rapists, pedos n murderers too
but nobody cares unless it affects you
so much life n love left to give
why should we hate when lifes there to live

all this pain leads to self hate
cuttin yaself, yeah thats great
people ignore the cries from within
then you go out n end it in sin
i wanna go back to bein a a lil child
when hate and sadness was fixed with a smile
these are dark days n theres no sign of any ends
all we need to do is make a few friends

lets turn it around n start with a smile
maybe one day it will all be worthwhile
all some people want is just to be hugged
so why not go out there and make them feel loved
lets just stop the wars n stop the fightin
sometimes life can b kinda frightnin
it duznt mean u need a gun or blade
what can be better than a new friend made


thats all i got took me like an hour to write that

please dont be too brutal it is the first thing ive ever written

defiance

good start there man....rhyme scheme is a bit ametuer, which can be expected for a first spit....the only real advice that will give u any help is basically just to practice...keep doing it..whenever u think of a bar, write it down...i use my phone quite a lot, where ever i am, if i think of a rhyme, i just punch it into my phone and save it in the drafts bit...so yeah, write down all your ideas and then work on them..u might write a rhyme that u think sounds sick, but if u work on it a bit more, u can change it to make it better...yeah...well thats what i do....hope this helps ya....

FreakyP

thnx

last night i just started randomly writing i didnt even think about it, it just kinda came out like that well it was in a slightly different order but i just thought it fit better this way

wow i gotta make that usable lol its kinda hard for me to keep that to a beat i can do it its just hard lol

i also need to work on my rhymes which of course i already knew lol thats just really deep though probably not usable if i went to a club tho lol some people are saying it sounds kinda emo lol which is not what im goin for

ill probably post an updated/finished piece later tonight whether its any good or not well have to see