rate my lyrics?

[gansta_gal]

hey im quite new 2 dis n not sure really wat itz all bout, heres some of my lyrics if u culd will u rate em 4 me plz?

thnx

yo, ya'll bout 2 get murked
ive bin bad since da day of my birth
im a soldier, the darkest of da dark
my bite is worse den my bark
i'll make my mark
i'll attack u like a shark
dont tempt me coz im close 2 da edge
any second now ima lose my head
i heard u tink ur gansta
buh ya nuttin buh a wanksta
u cant even bang ur own front door
but me, i can do much more
i'll cause u serious damage
2 much 4 u 2 manage
coz my lyrics r hot
i get dat a lot
it feels like evry1s watching me
feels like evry1s waiting 2 get me
i got a crew of over 90
frm da uk 2 overseas
i feel i've made my mark
buh remember im da darekst of da dark

i know ther not dat good buh im working on dem plz rate em if u can thnx

[GLK]

ok but i heard a lot betta from a rookie

[gansta_gal]

kk thnx anyway. i'll try n think of sum better 1s n post em on ere.

[idolizemystyle]

ITS ALL GD

[LyRiCaL_SoLdIeR]

Originally posted by gansta_gal
hey im quite new 2 dis n not sure really wat itz all bout, heres some of my lyrics if u culd will u rate em 4 me plz?

thnx

yo, ya'll bout 2 get murked
ive bin bad since da day of my birth
im a soldier, the darkest of da dark
my bite is worse den my bark
i'll make my mark
i'll attack u like a shark
dont tempt me coz im close 2 da edge
any second now ima lose my head
i heard u tink ur gansta
buh ya nuttin buh a wanksta
u cant even bang ur own front door
but me, i can do much more
i'll cause u serious damage
2 much 4 u 2 manage
coz my lyrics r hot
i get dat a lot
it feels like evry1s watching me
feels like evry1s waiting 2 get me
i got a crew of over 90
frm da uk 2 overseas
i feel i've made my mark
buh remember im da darekst of da dark

i know ther not dat good buh im working on dem plz rate em if u can thnx

your bite is worse den ur bark u say? not very suprising-we all kno ur a dog breed//
breath lyk a dog an hungry lyk a dog, u b screamin for ''PEDIGREE''//
u cant attack lyk a shark, u attack lyk a fish on its back//
ull b ''close to the edge'' wen u full from a cliff, il give ur back a wack//
u can do much more den a bang a door? damn right, u bang and bash all the tym if u get my drift//
if u want sum advice id say give ur tits and face a lift//
u say u got a crew overseas, yeh ur fans who want marage in iraq//
all i hav to do is see u young 1's try to rap, and il turn an ATTACK//
the only way ul make ur mark is if u get a red marker an dot it on my forhead lyk a seek//
den ul b screamin for ur fukin lyf by da tym iv hit my peak//

[idolizemystyle]

lyrical hittin it everrrrrytime

[Mek.01]

she sounds just like *mc ooooa* lol, lyrical gon murkin everyone lol big up lyrical soldier.......even tho she was just probably bored

[LyRiCaL_SoLdIeR]

loooool u got it

[GaNgStA 4 LyF]

yo iv gt sum lyricz bu i dow tink der 2 gd im v nu 2 dis sorta ting az i ay dun nuttin lyk dis b4 so im jus startin off!

I gt ur gyal wet wiv ma left hand
u lost ur virginity wiv ur right hand
u no ur lil bruva im hiz father
cuz i dun ur mother wivou no rubber
cuz i lv a

[GaNgStA 4 LyF]

dat wz s$$t o well @ least i tried enit

[Sharpie]

lol its tru... omg lyrikal soldja jus keeps on murkin..... no1s safe 2 buss dese days lol

[Mek.01]

lol...

[DirtyHaze]

ima break it off like dis,

im tooked on a border line,
were im pitchin dem stones
i hit da switchin
n den dem $$$$$es be gone
get it right figure
im lookin in ma rear view/
becuz da streets can hear you/
certain moves dat steer you
you gotta be wild
get in position cuz da street yall find
me n my team move ice like snow storms/
da price gets tighter dan vice grips
dis game is priceless
you get jabbed up wid ice picks/
ders no way you cud right dis/
seven on dose dices/
da way i likes it/
if itz beef/
you can find me inda background/
bustin da mack now/
you never back down/
$$$$$ you better back down/

luk into ma eyes tell me wot you can see/
dis rhyme is for da books like fraiser n ali/
strap up ya belt cuz we takin a ride/
through dis concrete jungle/
well see if you survive/
you gotta play by da rules cuz/
ders my $$$$$s are lukkin/
at night da streets are quiet but/
dem $$$$$s is workin.
you can sleep if you want/
date wen you kno itz real/
back against da wall/
as i spit dat crack/
hit you wid a freebe/
after dat you keep cumin back to see me/
see me ha now picture dat/
cuz im better dan all yall dat fink dey rap/
yall actin like ive neva pickd up a bat/
or picked up da mack/
n make ya bicth cry ova dat/
$$$$ chillin n relax/
dis aint school i tek ya jewels/
i aint givin em back/
let dem investigate me/
i aint givin em jack/
itz Haze
ive dunn band $$$$$s inda street/
for talkin all dat/
dats why every where i go i got beef/
in da east wid me,
dont $$$$ wid me ill shankya inya kneck,
n u tellya moms its a hickey/...

[mc_and-E]

gansta_gal you need to change your lyrics,
i think my 1st one is better than urs,
what is 'u cant even bang ur own front door
but me, i can do much more' about? them lyrics are $$$$.

[BaBy-GaNsTa-1]

hahaaha lyrical soldier murked gangsta gurl hard! n dirrty haze is tuff at spittin

[Mek.01]

i murked dirty haze u know, look on the oooa is safe thread i butchered oooa, tofie and dirt haze

[IdE-iLL]

MeK i fink evry1 knows ekacly who uve murked lol

[Mek.01]

lmao

[DirtyHaze]

hold up hold up....
am i seeing my name $$$$..

who did you slew $$$$$ who...

$$$$$ you murked who/
you didnt murk $$$$/
cuz dem lyrics you were spittin stank like..../
$$$$ your lyrics need discipline/
here to tek you lil $$$$$s back to skool/
n i know you hate skool/
but im here to educate/
so you better co-operate/
or ill hav2 operate/
n seperate/
your knees from ya shins/
baby gangsta, mek.1 dnt feel comfortable in his own skin/
Mek 1 now tell me if youll win/
$$$$$ im a boss/
so mek you better show me respect/
ill catch you slippin/
ill hav you tonguein kissing my tek/
mwah come/
tess me $$$$$ bwoi/
you dont wanna try it/
cuz police response is neva fast enuff/
to stop shot firing/
dnt be stupid/
find out who you fukin wid son/
b4 i find out where/
yo $$$$$ get her hair n nails done/
sumtime i cotch n lukk at life/
from a different angle/
i dnt know if im Gods child or satans angel/

cum against me n you on your own/
ill catch youll get ya brains blown/
i got a blingin chain/
haze flowin through ma veins/
im doin ma thang/
ma lyrics will spray/
run if you get away/
but ill find your where abouts/
n spit at you anuva day/

ahh $$$$$ dnt trip/
cuz i can spit/
i wont hesitate to let off a clip/
you runnin yo lip/
ahh $$$$$ dnt trip/
incase you didnt know who dis is/
its dirty/ $$$$$ dnt trip/


dat G-unit soldier/
Mek 1 jus sold ya/
your about to get murkd/
so dnt say i neva toldya/
you need to change dat to/
P-Unit soldier/
take however you want $$$$$/

you wanna spit at me go ahead/
but da last $$$$$ to try/
got hit n keeled ova/
mek 1 bled till he died/
$$$$$ im from Big Bad Birmz/
where da gats explode/
wen i spit at you/
ill watch you drop n role/
so dnt get i twisted/
ill bust shots n your wig will get lifted/
now dats gangsta/
yeah homie iknow cuzz i live it/
so if you bring da drama/
n da drama pop/
im bust my gat n it aint gone stop/
da lyrics you gona spit i dnt wanna hear it/
im a put da pistol to you if i hear it/
dis is not a game/
tell you agen/
dis is not a game/
youll feel da flame/
up against ya brain/
n its so hot/
i mek you wish it rained/

$$$$in Hell $$$$ OFF...
is dat me...
i aint goin write freestyles all day man/
Yo mek 1 ifink you shud rephrase dat $$$$ now/
N P-Unit Soldier/
Stop bein silly
lil willy/
$$$$ about/
n ill introduce you to my milli

[Mek.01]

aye im sitting right here, im not dead or bleeding ur fukin dumb man, u want me to murk u again?