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I-RoNiK

I write myself in words,
describe life,
not using 2 or 3 but many
I heard you think i'm crazy
won't try to deny it
it's true
i'm f*ckd up, I sucked up far too long
now I chewed it up, spat it out an stamped on it
you cramped my style
so I blew it up in your face
clamped it an lamped you one
that's where a sly look gets you these days
so what i'm versatile can't handle it?
scandal,
vandalize my property
go on savage it
got more chance of winnin the lottery,
i'll salvage it from the damage
and still be on top
coz that's where I belong
above you
S.O.B's
D.O.G's
say your
A.B.C's
an 1.2.3's
coz this be your final speech
'fore I take over
no longer a push over
over an over
I say it as many times as you like to listen
christen your lives with my evil
that's right
rebirth into a f*ckd up miracle
"don't be so cynical",
think you need clinical help
medical attention
the men in white coats are comin
but don't be too quick to mention my name
give them time to regain consciousness
coz when they hear they gonna lose their breath
and lose yours too
oh well you're all dead now,
screw you,
never liked you much anyways
wave to the angels, will you?
wear one of them halo's an get a 'cool' tatoo?
heaven's just the place for you
but not for long you can't even rest there
you're laid bare stripped of your dignity
now I can even see the roots in your
hair that you tried to hide for
so many years
well $$$$$ welcome to the real world, it's full of tears,
say your prayers
coz this rhyme's nearly over
duck, shelter, run undercover coz it don't matter where you hide,
I still get to you
I lied to get you here so there's not much else for me to lose
now I give you one last chance to escape
I suggest you pelt it before this decision changes
but don't think you got away with it, still got my eye on you
every corner that you turn you know I be there to spy on you
make sure you get what's comin to you,
so run along now go and learn one of life's big lessons
an while you're there look up the definition
of a f*ckd up,
twisted
mystical
premonition.

any feedback would be great!

J-kid

I swear wen u spit ur spose 2 rhyme

pappi

i rekon if u actually rhyme dat $$$$, structure it betta, u will b able 2 cum out wit summin much betta, coz it lookz like u mite b able 2 do summink wit a lil practice, but truthfully, i dint read ur whole verse coz it bore me, keep workin on it bruv,
kl

I-RoNiK

yeah dis is all first draft stuff well thanks for bein honest!

am a lass by the way :P

I-RoNiK

Here's somethin else I wrote more recently....

Life is a box
Look outside it
once in a while
to find sh*t
don't deny it
the chance to be
good if you
don't try it
an it's all
worthwhile if
you get a friend
out of it
to help you
through sh*t
when your
wires have fused
to sort your head
out when your
gettin confused
over
simple little things
that a 5 year
old could do
you think you've
lost it
gone crazy
remembering the bridge
we crossed
but we didn't cross it
see I told you
i've lost it
think even my rhymes
seen better days
i'm tryna
wipe the windscreen
down but it
stays hazy
but it's ok
i'm not crazy
I don't let sh*t
like that phase me
walking round in
a daze for days
i f*ckin hate it
an it amazes me
the amount of people
who so
narrow minded
could their story
be any more
one sided?
look at that
avalanche it's
already started
sliding
looks like I better
start gliding
find a hiding place
somewhere to
lace my shoes an
write my rhymes
in upper case
or lower case
for that matter
do anythin I f*ckin
choose to
I play the games
where I don't ever
lose to you

J-kid

im bored so let me battle you nd then u can take a thew pointers after da battle ill go first

I-RoNiK

well I aint ever done this before so i might be abit $$$$ but im up for it!!

J-kid

it wont reaaly be a battle more lyk bak 2 bak

I-RoNiK

ok den, show me what you can do!

J-kid

I-ronik u cud be alrite if u learned 2 rhyme wen u rhyme
please try nd take advantage as im handin u my time
I aint dat experienced but my bars r structured betta
Dont try nd make da best punclines, spittens lyk a letta
try nd take ur tym make sure peps can understand
but if ur battlin, each move must be thoruly planned
Its gud 2 be versatile so u can change how u flow
fast slow speed deep high pitch all different tempos
so basicly da final conclusion is its bes bein ur self
try 2 get ur message across not jus increasin ur wealth

I-RoNiK

J-kid, pull up a chair an listen up
i'm tryin hard to rhyme but looks like its goin tits up
I appreciate tha fact that i'm on borrowed time
that's why i'm sittin here spittin you a line
maybe i rushed it all before guess i'm your typical gemini
but if i'm sh*t who gives a sh*t at least I aven't turned to crime
just write coz this is the biggest release for me
let go of all the pain an let my emotions run free
don't give a f*ck about the pound sign, nor the dollars either
I lost my ma a year ago, tryna remember how to breathe
here in this world we're livin in
tryna seek out good but i'm constantly givin in to sin