My torture barz...

Dj Vex

Dont cuss yer i think iv improved since last time afta askin otha ppl advice, leave constructive criticism no harsh dissin...$afe!

I got various torturous methods, but to me it's all tha same/
I've enthralled tha game of torment, I'm in tha hall of fame/
I'm called insane cuz' I'll enclose you inside my walls of pain/
Persistantly maul your frame with medieval ball and chains/
Slowly spilling sulphuric acid over your skull to scald your brain/
Suspend ya on high beamz and await until ya fall in flames/
It's exciting when tha ropes tightening around yo vocal chords/
Provoke my sword n' I'll be enticing you with my Titan-Swing/
I'm tha unspoken lord, victims shall worship me despite tha king/
Am I frightening? Or should I ask how peaceful am I?/
Ponder those questions while I seathe these needles in eyez/
Bleed when ya cry, now your desperately breathing with sighz/
Leaving you beaten and pleading inside my dungeons corridorz/
Tha feeble will die, your soon to be corpse is tore from swordz/
Pain=pleasure, I increase it in measurez to enjoy torture more/

Holla! ~1~

SUPERSTAR SINISTA

gwarn bruv that was a heavy verse.

and your a dj so big up ya self.

MC Makka

yeah bro that was a nice tight verse keep it up

MC RHYMA G

hol'it up blud - nice verse!!! keep @ it hevyyyyyyyyyy

Dj Vex

Thanx yall..much betta feedback den ma last drop!

~1~

Mc Ice/Icy~b

that is 1 very nice verse but 1 thing...some words were used more than others.and you couldve tightened it with sum wordplay..but overall a pretty sweet verse

Vagina Walls

yea heavy, 4 a dj aswell! niceee, but the bars were bit long winded, so try inter rhmyin, but overall heavy!