me first eva chat

[laydee_ice]

dis is my first eva chat wt u fink::

o yo dis is laydee ice
roll like dice
chill like ice
dis is my lyrical rhyme
so wine and dine...........................me
yer gt me bling
so here i sing
me n me girls gt it goin on
so we wnt con
gt dis real $$$$
gt it rapped up like a hit

ant gt no time 4 haterz
or dem luved up daterz
jst give me sum dolla
so i can holla
out2 all dem boys
so i cn play wit toys
yer me out for sum fun
so wen its all dun
u will see dis face
more den twice
up in da stars
nt behind bars

yer me like da drink
and we will link
always gt a man
wit luks like dis i can
can ya afford dis
can ya even luk at dis
watch dis space
replaced wit my face

[Bob_the_rascal]

alrite 4 fst time...

[Bob_the_rascal]

but be more imaginative, use sum vocab skills

[Bob_the_rascal]

its 2 basic

[Bob_the_rascal]

yo laydee ice reeping the benefits//
i smack it wen it cums 2 rhyming like im hittin boxing mitts//
i scuba dive in the us and translate with the fishes//
i use liquid breath dialect to rearrange your wishes//
i keep up the heavy physicalities//
the originalities of the societies//
of which we live in//
men on sofa, women in kitchen//
continuing the alcohol prohibition//
ryhming like im a soldier on a mission//

[e.k.s]

you on a mission like a samalian looking for water.
with a stella in 1 hand & a mic in the other -call that a performer dont let me belt ya u like i was your mother.

Slip- slide- run- hide, im tha $$$$in byatchh in the tinted ride.
I be tha byatchh that places you on the side. you know i aint get denied.

blood it spills in this war field, bow down rascal you jus done got killed...
get off that damn sofa-- you gawd dayum joker---jeezz man lemme provoke ya

safe got a lil bored

[G RyMe]

rite laydee ice thats ok 4 1st time but think of structuring a verse eg

laydee ice gona roll like dice cos im cold like ice
hittin u wit a hard blow cos im the hottest spice

sumin like that ur lines r 2 short work on structure clever words vocab as bob said.....

e.k.s & bob she was askin 4 feedback she wasnt battling u 2 jus jump at any chance 2 battle lol.........

[e.k.s]

i get so bored G.... + i catch joke from it....

[G RyMe]

lol @ u y not give her sum help instead of rinsing her joker lol

[e.k.s]

i was rinsing rascal actually matey as per usual

[Slick Miss]

It was boring.

And obvious.

And I've heard the exact same rhyming scheme in every other commercial track released since 2001.

First four lines for example, we all know what song they're in.

Heard it all before.

Be original.

Think about what you write, not what everyone else is writing.

Same goes for what you wana say, not what they wana hear.

[criztal]

yo slick miss u knw ur spittin techniques, now u spit !!!!!

[Slick Miss]

Lol.

No thanks.

[Bob_the_rascal]

eks u joker, i always rinse you...like a washing basket

[e.k.s]

$$$$ i thought i got away with that comment.......

[jawn_blazey]

Originally posted by Slick Miss
...And I've heard the exact same rhyming scheme in every other commercial track released since 2001.
...Heard it all before.

like u heard it on a jaimeson song? lol

Originally posted by laydee_ice
roll like dice
chill like ice

[bubz]

Originally posted by laydee_ice
dis is my first eva chat wt u fink::

o yo dis is laydee ice
roll like dice
chill like ice
dis is my lyrical rhyme
so wine and dine...........................me
yer gt me bling
so here i sing
me n me girls gt it goin on
so we wnt con
gt dis real $$$$
gt it rapped up like a hit

ant gt no time 4 haterz
or dem luved up daterz
jst give me sum dolla
so i can holla
out2 all dem boys
so i cn play wit toys
yer me out for sum fun
so wen its all dun
u will see dis face
more den twice
up in da stars
nt behind bars

yer me like da drink
and we will link
always gt a man
wit luks like dis i can
can ya afford dis
can ya even luk at dis
watch dis space
replaced wit my face

[bubz]

dat was gud gyal,im a first tima too.c wot ya fink of mine:

You think ur a playa,all tha gurls lookin at ya,dissin ya,dismissin ya,confusin ya an abusin ya//
You aint seen a real G yet,u just a baby daddi,walkin round the streetz wid dat limp,we all know u look like a G.I.M.P,not a P.I.M.P//
So,give it up u wanabe,cos believe me,im gona step into the money.Try and confront me cos im the real G,no sum low life flea//
B to tha U tha B to tha Z,aint been doin this $$$$ for long,but ya getiin ripped in tha head//
I've accomplished what iv came here for,dont even try to spit back cos you no forsure dat i can come back even more//
You can hate me,contemplate me but you will never succeed in the need to proceed//
You dont know what i'v been through,you cant judge me even if u intend to//
So all u fakaz an hataz out dere,dont even try to play wid me yer!!


Foreal,dat was $$$$!lol!but wana c wot u fink init.