Lyrics // not a Battle place.

[Hoodzy]

Don't come here with negative comments unless it is to help, i just needed to express myself.

Everywhere i turn, Death is calling,
The Dark shadow over me, Now I'm Falling,
The Lair is welcoming, they've taken me already,
I slip and i stumble, my fall ain't Steady,
They've injected me with poison, started seeing Things,
Sub-Consciously must have kissed the Devils Ring,
Easy target, a Servant, my own souls Gone,
I'm weak can't fight back, so my soul burns long,
Stuck in eternal Flame, They wont leave me alone,
I got Death following me on my way Home,
I can't sleep, my eyes wont open Again,
My bodies over printed with Hells Emblem,
Printed with the burning Metal, my Flesh Scarred,
Don't know why this life, is it my fault its hard,
What have i done to deserve this on me,
No escaping, they wont leave me, its Destined to be.

Thread might be updated frequently.. i needed my own place to write, no battle thing.

[Hoodzy]

Show no mercy, my hearts been ripped from me,
Got that btch exposed,she still thinks she has sht on me,
repeatedly, on her knees, she's at it physically,
The boy don't give a $$$$, "just open your mouth and swallow me",
Who broke her jaw its constantly hanging open,
the muscle between the top and the bottom is broken,
not even somewhere private, in the church she's chokin',
killed her off in 4 bars, no longer has hope and,
All actions has its consequences,
News like that in a girls school is a prison sentence,
Can't handle it? don't do it, it takes common Sense,
Now she's got that rep, she faces its imprisonments,
Punishment, what she deserves, i bet she denies it all,
No one elses fault but her own, for letting her trousers Fall,
One man to the next quicker than a Cannon Ball,
Too much pain and hurt, now its time for her to Crawl,
Back into the shade, where she belongs A-gain,
She wont stop, she wont change, just keep giving Brain,
Like nicotine, her blood prefers sperm 'cus thats whats in her veins,
God smite her, she's disgraceful, put her behind hells chains,
"Good Church Girl" what happens behind closed doors,
if someone was to walk in while all her clothes were on the floor,
Can't believe i used to like her before,
And the truth is, she's really a disguised whore,
People say, why am i friends with the other,
'cus they're not giving one man head, and getting fingered by another,
Ha-Ha, thought you could be undercover?
Your more dim, than a camera, with a Lens Cover,
Watch when Boys start to Fear her,
Herpes no one wants to go near her,
In the church letting the lord hear her?
Jheez, the grim has nerves, that one called Sakira.

[kd0t]

Really feeling the first verse, well put together and has nice imagery, even though it doesnt tell a straight story as such and kinda jumps about a bit(not a bad thing) it all comes together well and paints an overall picture.

Second verse isnt as good so far but it is half written still, the only thing I would say and feel free to ignore it because it is strictly my opinion from past experience of trying to put what's happening on paper, but I think it might be worth kinda taking a step back and not being so direct and be a bit more abstract, dunno its hard to explain but the way you wrote your first verse was not so much I hurt because of X and Y but more telling a story so I can see you hurt. No idea if that makes any sense, am struggling trying to word it. But like I said it is still unfinished and I should really reserve judgement for when it is.

[Hoodzy]

xD i kinda understand you, thanks for the constructive critisism,
the second verse was kinda a diss to someone in real, as told to write one to her and hopefully it becomes clear when i add more, also it takes abit of knowing the person to understand it, thanks for feedback (Y)

[kd0t]

wasnt saying it was bad or anything quite the opposite, am definitely looking forward to reading more

[Hoodzy]

xD Never thought you ment it in a bad way :P
Added more to it now =]

[Hoodzy]

Before, there was ember in my body, ignition in my brain,
Re-lighted, The spark built again from that dreaded Flame,
Heated up now, Blood boiling, its reaching the Point,
Where all things disintergrate, the fading of my joints,
My heart falls to ashes, which lies beside my Feet,
My own blood becomes the ink, that is falling on the Sheet,
The Venom seeps inside, Taking over my mind,
I can't sleep, i can't feel, now im going Blind,
The purple veins surface the skin, They're showing,
Temperature rises, and i continue Growing,
Conflict in my body, tryna' hide it from Taking over,
Anger surfaces, now im ready, mother$$$$er i've told ya',

More might come.

[Bane]

Woah, Hoodzy. You go hard.

You must excel here cos ur battle bars were good but this stuff is exceptional. The one about the grim was a lot aswell.

[Hoodzy]

Thanks :P i'm not really a battle person, i need to work on it xD

[kd0t]

Woah, Hoodzy. You go hard.

You must excel here cos ur battle bars were good but this stuff is exceptional. The one about the grim was a lot aswell.

co-sign that definitely.

That second verse developed loads by the end, was feeling it more than the snippet you first posted, really comes into its own with the full story.

3rd like the first was heavy!!! keep it up, wanna see what else you have

[Hoodzy]

Fountain pen, Spurts the Venom in the Cartridge,
Let the poison enter from the Paper to your Cartilage,
I Write with the poison, 'cus all i write is Truth,
Truth hurts, Like when you see a Bleeding Youth,
Sicker, when a wound gets deeper in our Society,
Can't walk down the Streets without getting Anxiety,
Tied to me, The street haunts, with its own kind,
Hell bought to earth itself, Youths are the Devil Combined,
With Knife Crime, Killing another Human, We're all the same,
All Related, we still need someone to take the Blame,
Our whole Race is all Blind, Humans are faulty its obvious,
No ones perfect, most of us are all Oblivious,
We build up what we wan't to see, not What it is,
Blind to the fact, we can't live like this,
and the truth, we'll only realise when its to late to Recover,
Already drenched in the blood shed by our Sisters and Brothers.

[Hoodzy]

Won't be writing for abit i imagine, got alot going.

[Hoodzy]

Trust no one, My left eye stays open throughout the Night,
My minds shaped as a Triangle, And the point of it is Bright,
All i need in this world, to keep me Going through,
Left Eye and a Triangle, i got one eye not Two,
Because how can you Trust Two things if what you see is not the Same,
One eye can conceive me, One eye can be a Game,
Eye tricks, Nothing is a reliable source anymore,
Only Truth is the ones you can Feel in your Core.

Short and $$$$, i wrote this at 3am only bothered to copy it up..
Not feeling so good either :l