Jus' a lil' drop

Dj Vex

Aight this is ma first drop in this forum, as you can see by ma name i'm not really a MC but i do like to write some lyrics but at d mo im still developing ma skills....

See ima baller, while your a bama/
You might have a big bean but i'll be the lady charmer/
Coz when they look into my eyes they will see a perfect panoroma/
Where trees grace the land and the sun shines like ring armour /
I don't need a biscuit to be pull a gangsta boo/
I jus' bop through the streets with ma wreckless crew/
But even ma crew don't help me get into a baby's shoe/
Just take the gal's hand and express her value/
Don't treat her like a bend and ask her how many mans there're her queue/
There's too many busta's claimin they gangstas/
Senseless $$$$$es lacking minds, school drop out failures/
When they see a fyne gyal they spring on her cat/
Next day it be her man that wants a combat/
Truss that/
You see it every day/
A fight over a chick leading to deaths by an AK/
I must admit it's not always the men that start it/
Lettin' in too many $$$$s in their coochies is what these skets commit/
These sluts love off all these black mans/
When he with a next gyal the da shinermite gets prang/
They jus do it for the popularity to hear Chantelle say "your cool" /
Truth is he only shagged you to get some cut up and release his fuel/


Yall holla bk n tell me what u think. 1

Life

sorry its $$$$, just for the main reason being

you had to put in " These sluts love off all these black mans"

i was thinking it was quite alright, nice concept, but you had to spoil it.

it was just another standard garage mc chat, even thou are a dj, so i will let you off.

Exzes

sorry its $$$$, just for the main reason being

it's $$$$

Dj Vex

OK! I think you were a lil' harsh there you could have used a slighty more nicer word!

Yo Life dat line weren't racist or nuttin i woz jus sayin it coz a lot of gals (well up north newayz) go on like they all that n they love off ma mates who r black jus so they can get a name for themselves. They know as well as ma mates!

By the way Exzes you could have commented on why my lyrics were so $$$$ instead of jus writing "it's $$$$." You could have even told me how i could improve them but then again what would you know about lyrics. at least Life said somethin' appropriate about my lyrics.

Holla! 1

Vagina Walls

no hating but exzes knows a bit bout rhyming, he's heavi himself!

Dj Vex

aight kool so lemme hear a rhyme of yours exzes n oh yeah wot did u fink of da drop motormouth, b honest plz.

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Vagina Walls

$$$$....

Dj Vex

Ok motormouth put em dslz away...

Vagina Walls

nah jsut get ur bars quite even, they are every where at the mo, so it can flow easier, im no pro so you'll have 2 ask sumone else....

Dj Vex

thanx 4 da advice...

Exzes

you can't take criticism cause you seem way too sensitive,
with your badman lyrics, you start sounding repetitive,
talking so much $$$$, you like an irishman on a oral laxitive,
relax it kid, try speaking from the heart and not the fist,
just cause i tell the truth ain't mean you gotta get pissed,
getting 'vex' cause you got dissed, 24 hours till your dismissed,
getting hernia's from stress and exploding like an intestinal cist,
turning inside out, without a doubt, i'm the guy that'll make you scream and shout,
coming with a 40 tonne clout,
as of yesterday i'd never met a guy who could last more than a bout,
will you be the one standing victorious after all of this?
or the one laying down shouting abuse and getting vicous?

bleh......write......more.....later.....am....tire d....and....people....are....trying....to....chat. ...on....msn......................doh

SUPERSTAR SINISTA

BLUP BLUP BLUP....GWAN ANDI

Dj Vex

nice chat!

Exzes

*bows*

SUPERSTAR SINISTA

i was just trying to make you feel good.

Exzes

and i was just trying to appear egotistical