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PJ12345

im so hungry for war like a feen needin raw, like a pimp needing whores, on da block clockin jaws, every step i take be against the law, yet every step i take makes me closer to the lord/ can i afford to take another thugs life cos mines be trife, aint gotta a wife, if im clyde then bonnie is my knife/moms said i was a disgrace, told me you aint gonna make nottin of yaself dnt show me ya face/so i gave up lifes chase,i returned to first base, the heart of the streets where every murder is discreet, where blood falls at ya feet,hustlers always cheat every second a coffin is placed 6ft deep


Im from the place where mothers need drugs to survive, dealers wandering the streets with intent to supply, little dudes be waking up each morning ready to die, with people asking them why , they livin a lie, yet they try, to explain ,how guns cause yet numb the pain, in their brain the world is looking at them in disdain, the 4 walls of the hood be driving them insane cos ther aint a way out so you can shout as much as u want but everythin is nothing no need to front. Im from the place where you put one step wrong and fall in the gutter, cant never be shook cos dudes know u scared when u start to stutter, you feel alone cos their aint no where u can call home and nobody is bothered about you so the streets you rome, pickin up the chrome, penetrate the skin membrane and shatter the bone, where Im from is more vivid than the point of view of Malcolm X and Nasir Jones. Im from where BET is for soft folks not stab you in the middle of the nights folks, aint scared to bite folks, shoot you and ya folks homes. We never sleep, just rest our heads at night, thoughts streaming through the mind like what tommrow gonna hold and who we gonna fight, this is ghetto childs plight, you have no idea of a ghetto childs might. Where Im from!

PJ12345

tell me what u think

Dr_Grimsly

allow writin like dat man put it like dis:

im so hungry for war like a feen needin raw,
like a pimp needing whores, on da block clockin jaws,
every step i take be against the law,
yet every step i take makes me closer to the lord/
can i afford to take another thugs life cos mines be trife,
aint gotta a wife, if im clyde then bonnie is my knife/
moms said i was a disgrace,
told me you aint gonna make nottin of yaself dnt show me ya face/
so i gave up lifes chase, i returned to first base,
the heart of the streets where every murder is discreet,
where blood falls at ya feet,
hustlers always cheat every second a coffin is placed 6ft deep


Im from the place where mothers need drugs to survive,
dealers wandering the streets with intent to supply,
little dudes be waking up each morning ready to die,
with people asking them why , they livin a lie, yet they try,
to explain ,how guns cause yet numb the pain,
in their brain the world is looking at them in disdain,
the 4 walls of the hood be driving them insane
cos ther aint a way out so you can shout as much as u want
but everythin is nothing no need to front.
Im from the place where you put one step wrong and fall in the gutter,
cant never be shook cos dudes know u scared when u start to stutter,
you feel alone cos their aint no where u can call home
and nobody is bothered about you so the streets you rome,
pickin up the chrome, penetrate the skin membrane and shatter the bone,
where Im from is more vivid than the point of view of Malcolm X and Nasir Jones.
Im from where BET is for soft folks
not stab you in the middle of the nights folks,
aint scared to bite folks, shoot you and ya folks homes.
We never sleep, just rest our heads at night,
thoughts streaming through the mind like what tommrow gonna hold
and who we gonna fight,
this is ghetto childs plight, you have no idea of a ghetto childs might.
Where Im from!

wen u put it like that ^^ its easier to read if you get me?
yeah good story line, deepness to it n dat..
but u did miss a few lines lol
other then good job!

im so, hungry for war like a feen needin raw,
like a pimp needing whores, on da block clockin jaws
^ dat had a nice flow to it..spit it out loud n it rolls of ya tounge lol

ABU

I peeped tha rhyme both ways...substance wise its dope homey...str8 from tha heart..i dug it