free spitting...no beef...

dutty_wine

he used to feel me up,
touch me up ,i
diidn't nuthin cuz i thought he'll beat me up
lock me up
throw away the key make me suffer silently in ma own peace.

it was back in 2001 when e first grabbed me started feeing me up,touching me up whispering in ma ear u'll b vry useful in bed wid sumtyn inbetween i was like eeee...get away u should.t b saying $$$$ like that i'm ur neice ur ma uncle that's how it's suppose 2 b plzzz

STOP
feeling me up
touching me ,
i carn't say nothing cuz den he'll beat me up throw away the key making me suffer silently in ma own peace.

i carn't sleep is this a bad dream??..i've had worser then worse things happen 2 me this is 1 of them things i just carn't get owt of,,i still hear his voice in ma sleep GOD help me get rid of this beast he's got me feeling mentally weak and physically sick//ma family are not even noticing cuz i'm keeping a smile on ma face although i've got fear building inside of me...uncle plzzz STOP

feeing me up
touching me up
i carn't say nothing cuz den he''ll beat me up
lock me up
throw away the making me suffer silently in ma peace..yeah e would let me suffer in ma own peace silently.



(talking) gyals i regret not telling any1 wat was happening to me...tym and tym agen it get worse everydai i let this beast take control of me...THAT'S Y WE NEED TO STOP THINGS LYK THIS HAPPENING.so gyals stand up 4yaself and speak.

it goz on but i cut it short...tell me wat ya fink..if ya want add mre verses 2 it...

LadyTitch

Dats propa gurd init keep it goin.id lurv to see wat da rest of it is init
holla
x

dutty_wine

thanx...cudn't type allda rap it otherwise i would of been there all nyt lol...but it's proper deep da trk is..i've realeased it on a mixtape already lol..

dutty_wine

[yo daddy wat u duin i du not want another beaten// im still sore from the nyt b4 wen u came in at 4//DRUNKEN smelling like a paddy took of ya belt and beat me till u saw me bleed wid tears running down ma face i went 2 sleep that nyt wishing i'dwake up 2 take ma last breaths// oh yes!!! i'm still in ma bed shutting maself from the screams of relief dat i still got ma own two feet//but god is puting me through all of this,but y are u putting me through of this?//mumma wer are u i need u will i ever reach 17?//i dnt wanna reach 17 cuz dat's just another year of pain i dnt wanna even c ma 17 birthday//but ppl keep askin me questions about ma bruises daddy but i won't tell da truth daddy it's only cuz u taught me how 2 lie and lie that's a reason y i wanna commit suicide sum1 plz give ma dat knife let ma commit suicide.

CHORUS.

cuz it's in these streets u gotta stay on ya toes and wer u gunner end up nobody knows//in these steerts u gotta stay on ya toes and wer u gunr end up nobody knows GOD on knows knows.

i remember back in da day wen i was on da street working 4 a few pennies ppl used 2 luk at me lyk i was something dirty//i've been on the streets since the age of 3 cuz ma dad was a druggy ma mum was depreesed having me around was 2 much stress//at the age of 6 i started getting paid 4 making lyrics not 4 keeping the men hapi//DAT AIN'T ME//so gyals do not say u hate ya family cuz dey diddnt put u on da street at the age of 3 2 pat da next flat rent so gyals just love ya parents.

CHORUS

cuz it's in these steets u gotta stay on ya toes and wer u gunr end up nobody knows//it's in these steets u gotta stay on ya toes and wer u gunr end up nobody knows god only knows nobody knows...PPL LISTEN I'M CRYING OWT LOUD...

yo daddy wat u duin i du not want another beaten i'm still saw from the nyt b4 wen u came in at 4..... and that was the last nyt i saw his belt being slashed across ma face cuz on da same nyt i was in ma mothers arms taken my last few breaths.



feed back plz...i know it's a bit long ...still. :

r_double_b

its good still, nyc to see a story beeing told not jus im gunna stab your grannys cat

BLAS-THEME

It Goes Like This;

Hush Little Babies
Dont You Cry
Knives An Jugular Veins
Makes Many People Die
Sick Thoughts I Have
So I Kill With Vo-cab
Mommy Came First
Then I Slayed Yo-dad


Lmao...if U Use My Shyt..u Betta Pay Me Or Tha Chorus Will Be Sung At'cha Eulogy...lol

the1JD

Yo Let it Roll, playin a predictable field
its a skill to stay home without payin a bill
Fret the strings on the axe let me give u a thrill
cos these rappers only livin to rack up their kills

The industry is killin me, no sensibility
You spit without flow your contents are killin me
I tell a story when I write, nd I think I tell it well
I dont need to raise my voice theres no need to yell
So I'll fly up to the moon make everything alright
You could quit but come along like your flying a kite
So if you feelin the flow then just follow my words
We'll be the hottest on the block the new $$$$ you heard


Raahhhhhh

MUSKK_2008

^^ Dats Sick ^^

Neekan

Basic rhyming..the flow was off as the lines were too off, may need an iambic pentameter? :P

ABU

NOT NEEDED AT ALL..U JUST NEED TO RELAX..THE RHYTHMS ARE WITH THOSE WHO DO THE WRITING...SO MUCH FOR U TRYING TO MAKE AN ARSE OF YA'SELF. U SUC...CEEDED

“	Originally Posted By: Neekan Basic rhyming..the flow was off as the lines were too off, may need an iambic pentameter? :P	”

Neekan

“	Originally Posted By: ABU NOT NEEDED AT ALL..U JUST NEED TO RELAX..THE RHYTHMS ARE WITH THOSE WHO DO THE WRITING...SO MUCH FOR U TRYING TO MAKE AN ARSE OF YA'SELF. U SUC...CEEDED	”

Not needed? Relax? I come here to give out constructive critisism and you're saying I 'make an arse' out of myself.

Whatever I said was to help him so he could improve in the future. If each and every other member is as ignorant as you then nobody will be able to accept their weaknesses in this kinda sh1t. Maybe it's you who is making an arse of out yourself for replying to my post.

I made this profile because I have nowhere to flow. I saw that this wasn't exactly the best educated forum in texting or rap, which is why I want this account deleted. It seems they still haven't deleted it..

MUSKK_2008

Lol, If you want somewhere to flow and shizz you came to right place, you just started off on the wrong foot.

GJK

I come from the UK,
Its not like America,
UK Grime scene ya im checkin ya,
Promotion of drugs guns knives and violence,
The last generation, have to suffer in silence,
The New generation, Spittin on Grime, but its Genocide,
10 year olds get shot, for no reason,
The killers get put in prison for the rest of there life,
Thats 2 lives wasted, Its not gods plan, its stupidity based on,
And they blame music, Its a sound you choose it,
Waste mc's spit bars about cars $$$$$es guns,
Its not for fun, Young breds listen to it like ill buy a gun,
It sounds good, in 5 years time he'll be in prison or dead.

MUSKK_2008

Listen..
Theres young kids on the roads trying to make something of there life//
But most of the time those little kids get involved with a knife//
And they think that sh*ts kool, running round breaking all the rules//
Nah trust me ~ that sh*t ain't kool, Just stick the guidelines and stick to the rules//
Like the other day in the hood, someone got shot//
Think to your self, 'that could of been me'//
Yeah i know it ain't a nice thought, so stop rolling round like a G//
Cause that is the sh*t that gets you killed and it'd hurt your family//
And don't forget a wifey, hubby or your friends//
After you hear this think, 'do i really wanna be rolling in tha ends'//
Nah after you think bout it, i don't think you would//
So for fucck sake people, stop wearing ya hood//
And for fucck sake people stop acting all G//
Cause everyday i look at the news and what i see//
I see people getting robbed, people getting shot, but most importantly, people getting hurt//

I don't wanna turn this in to a diary, but i might as well tell ya bout my life//
How i don't have a dad and nearly got involved with a knife//
But luckily i had some friends who were there for me//
Not forgetting, when i met that perfect wifey//
Anyway yeah back to my dad//
This is how it started, yeah started very sad//
He started drinking in front of me, which i thought was quite bad//
Cause this was at a young age when i needed a dad//
I will always remember when he fell and he cracked head//
Looking back at that day, i wish he was dead//
But because i was young that was something that I'd dread//
But i do wish, i could see him again, so i knock him out//
Because him caring??? Is something that i doubt//
And you might think this is fake, Nah it ain't, cause I'm real on the inner and real on the out//


Hmm i wasn't expecting to write that much thats all freestyle and all true bout my life, sorry if it don't make any sense just sometimes hard to talk bout init but i like expressing how i feel so yee.
Hold tight all the true ones out there, much love x
- Musk

GJK

muskk thats proper gd lol

ABU

dutty_wine

how's every1 duin??well jus write dis so plz du hit me up on feedbk...




yo mummy wat u duin i du not want anuva wackin,
im still saw from the beaten u gave me before,
mummy stop shouting at me,
im trying 2 sleep soon i'll R.I.P leaving u happy,
why dnt u jus berry me alive,
you'll b stress free instead saying how much u hate me
those wrds haunt me in my sleep,
god oh lord protect me from this beast
i prey 2 u everynyt,
give me the strengh 4 me 2 take ma own life,
show me da after life,

yo mummy my wish aint cumming tru,
du me a favour,kill me before i KILL U,
thats y i wanna i wanna die,
so mother plz pick up dat sharp knife,
stab me where the beat flows,
so i can introduce me soul.
to the next wrld up a bove.....

guys b honest bout da lyrics..if ya think they $$$$ jus step up say it..and also tell me y and how YOU think i can improve on it..

MUSKK_2008

Das good, i can't really think of anything you would need to change except the last line, like try to make it shorter maybe so it flows with the rest but other then that i think its good.
Tell me what you think of mine please, don't cuss me or anything cuz that was freestyle what i did.
Safe, - Musk

dutty_wine

safe 4 da feedbk..i changed da last few lines ..made dem shorter ..dat better now???i love ya flows..esp 4 a freestyler..keep it up doe..ya good dnt let any1 tell ya any diffrent....x