Dumb

[DustySkidz]

This is one I recorded a few days ago. Will get it on audio as soon as I can, but here's the lyrics. It's got a sort of dirty south beat.

You don't want none (x8)
Sing It!

(Hook)
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Fool get out of my face because you don't want none
Sing it!
(x2)

Verse 1

Fool you must be Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb,
If you thought that when you stepped up, that I was gonna run,
Dusty Skidz is my name, also, AKA Reck,
Fool, you must be $$$$ing dumb, you'd better show me respect
If you dumb diddy dumb, stay the $$$$ out my way,
And shut your $$$$ing mouth if you got nothing to say,
Or you'll get done, diddy done, diddy diddy, done done,
Recking up the game, I be shining bright like the sun
I've got my shells in my head, and my mic is my gun,
Fool, get out my face, because you don't want none,
I fire dums dums into your ears, they be exploding your head,
You don't wanna test my skills, or I'll leave your career dead
Fool, you dumb diddy dumb, diddy diddy, dumb dumb,
You use a knife to battle with, but I'm using a gun,
And I keep reloading it with the deadliest rounds,
Dummies run and duck and hide when i fire off a round,
Sing it!

(Hook)
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Fool get out of my face because you don't want none
Sing it!
(x2)

Verse 2

Fool don't $$$$ wit me, I'm your mother$$$$ing problem,
Dummies step to me, but now I'm gonna stomp them,
Laying down tracks like the Chinese did for the Yanks,
I got the game listening, trouble starting in the ranks
My style is infectious because my style is ill,
I feel like a blind lover, because I do what I feel
Swinging like a wrecking ball, blowing up like a nuke,
Dummies duck my rounds, if they ain't hit, it's a fluke,
Because I spray lyrical rounds like an AK-47,
I could kick a hundred bars, dummies stop after eleven,
Because they dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb,
I've got a hundred ideas, but they ain't got none
I ain't rhyming bout drugs, I ain't rhyming bout jewells,
I tell it how I see it, I be exposing all fools,
Who wanna step, steppy step, steppy step up to me,
They be dumb diddy dumb, as dumb as dummies can be
Sing it!

(Hook)
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Fool get out of my face because you don't want none
Sing it!
(x2)

Verse 3

So duck, diddy duck, diddy duck as I spray,
I can't be $$$$ing played because I'm too old to play,
And you stuck, sticky stuck, Sticky sticky, stuck stuck,
Because It's dummy hunting season and I don't give a $$$$
And my style ain't broke, breaky breaky, broke, broke,
But you need to fix yours cos when you spit it's a joke,
And I'll say, saidy say, saidy saidy, say say,
Whatever the $$$$ I want, fool get the $$$$ out my way
Sing it!

(Hook)
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Dumb diddy dumb, diddy, diddy, dumb, dumb
Fool get out of my face because you don't want none
Sing it!
(x2)

[MagicMilo]

Reads well, look forward to hearing it

[DustySkidz]

Yo, tell me what you think of this. I'm getting an album together, but before i put anything on wax, i need to know if the lyrics are any good. Gimme some feedback. Cheers my peeps!!

[Trow_Bow]

If you got a phat beat with that, then it could slide.... the knife-gun line could use a little weak sauce though... it makes it seem like you're asking to get dissed.... you gotta be confident, and you deffinately seem it, but tellin people about it in a song ain't the time or place... thats what battling is for.
I suggest not using a X-8 at the beginning...or if you are gonna use a x-8.... maybe try throwing something in the middle of it. other than that.... Good luck. Your rhymes are tight, hope the crowd wanna bite.
-TROW

[Exzes]

Last verse and the 'Sing it!' are two things I ain't really feeling Skidz.

I done a read through, a couple of the lines seem a little stretched? Namely the middle two lines on the first verse:

I fire dums dums into your ears, they be exploding your head,
You don't wanna test my skills, or I'll leave your career dead

Don't seem to go with the flow of those around it.

Other than that, it's seeming aight Skidz. Please though, in your next track, stop the barreling. Dumb diddy dumb is ok for the chorus, but it gets a little boring if you say it repeatedly during the verses too.

[DustySkidz]

Cheers for the feedback. Appreciated. This sounds quite good when you spit it though, but I'll take on board what you said and tweak it a bit

[Exzes]

Give us a listen then Skidz.

[DustySkidz]

I've recorded this, but to be honest, it needs re-recording. The levels were all wrong and it was a first take so it sounds a bit s'hit. I'm gonna go to my DJ's house on Tuesday night, and I'll re-record it and post it. I'll send you the address when I do it. I'll probably have a few other tunes recorded by then as well

Reading back, the 'Dum Dums' bar is quite hard to spit. I've thought about taking it out, but once I write something, I don't like to change it too much, i.e. When it's done, it's done. But I appreciate that it needs a bit of a tidy up.

And the knife-gun thing, I suppose what I was trying to say is that the gun represents me having more than one topic (you know, ammo for the gun), and the knife is about only having one thing to spit about. I dunno if that makes sense, but that was what I meant.

Oh yeah, I agree, the sing it bit looks a bit wack. I originally planned to have my mate's sing the chorus, so it was sort of just telling them to sing it. I may have to take that out.

But as i said, I'll re-record this, and you'll get a better idea of the song.

[augustus]

i dont deal in bars, its strictly keys
all u real gangsters no what i mean,
coke so pure, it makes ya nose bleed
moved onto snowflakes, promoted from weed.
cut the pure $$$$ cus i gotta crew to feed.
what do u want?!
cus i can deliver, on the lear jet direct from bolivia, with no trivia
the truth is what im giving ya
shivers down my spine, when i think of what i did to ya
u stepped outta line so i had to get rid of ya

im the roman emperor of this lyrical $$$$, guard your fort when i start to spit,
cus if u get hit, there aint no comin back, like a million man legion when my words attack, uzi's packed in the gucci mac, get the job done then i fade to black.

[delight_21]

mine was much betta, don't ya agree?

[DustySkidz]

Still can't get this recorded. Doin' my head in!!! My DJ's pc is messed up big time, but I'll get all my tunes recorded at some point, and then I'll post the link to them

[j-kid1]

i wudnt do an album more a mixtape u get me

[augustus]

dum diddy, diddy daddy, wakey wakey
come on dustyskidz ya know dem lyrics a shakey
u sound like billy ray cyrus doing achey brakey
i didnt wanna cus ya but these lyrics made me
now we gotta battle cus ya really hate me
but i flow so sick ya know ya have to rate me!

dum diddy daddy daddy spankey spankey
ya lyrics are w ank ya best run get a hankey
its positive criticism and in time u'll thank me
but ya pi-ssed yaself ya jeans a damp, see!
best change ya style an turn to plan B
cus i beat ya like im dirty den and u was angie

dum diddy diddy daddy hokey cokey
i see what ya sayin i agree totally
"YA BARS ARE LAME" feel free to quote me!
ya say ya want an album but ya chances are ropey
ya need to be smart to rhyme and your too dopey
i hope ya come back soon cus at the top its lonely

ya reckon i can get a deal?

[delight_21]

well there was a slight improvement

[augustus]

you wanna battle delight?

[delight_21]

yea ok

[augustus]

you go first

[delight_21]

whats goin on with this boy
he wants lyrics that will annoy
so i merk him with lots of joy
an it aint hard for me to do so watch me deploy
ya aint got no skill, i can do this like its a thrill
make ya so scared that ya shud just chill
an i will...beat u until
ya come up with somthin brill
your easy, ya dont please me
takin on the best ya lose surely
but i play fairly, givin ya a chance maybe
cos i aint scared g, ya more like a wannabee
tryna defeat a lyrical mc who writes greatly
this is delight writin delightly, an ill murk you truly
give me whateva ya got, ya wont beat me
cos im takin you on wisely
whateva ya got dont suprise me
its not healthy, tryna battle someone who does it tromendasly
so give it all up now cos i dont bretend to be
an mc writin merkfully, you cant do it
ya $$$$ dont please me, so just leave me
at the moment im givin it you easy
so take ya chance believe me
i could merk more dangerously

[Exzes]

For f'ucks sake Delight, for a forum moderator, you should know not to battle in other people's threads.

Make a new one.

[DustySkidz]

Yeah, sort it out Angel Delight