bad habit...

[G RyMe]

i can clearly remember the day that smoked my 1st $$$
jacked sum geek in school then took box home in my bag
wondered wot the fuss is y people choke n then cough
$$$$ it tried it then im buying it yea a bad habits started off

yea now i wish i never done back in them days i didnt see
used 2 be a sick skill footballer yea i had a career ahead of me
banging goals in every week nutmegs over head kicks top corner
about 8 years down the line i know y cigarette packets warn ya

linking girls in parks drinking $$$$ing under slides gettin pissed
stopped training every week that $$$$ was gettin crossed off my list
school lessons got missed id rather sit in my m8s house n toke
cant run anymore only bun draw then blow out potent skunk smoke

was like a man already was nearly 15 then had 2 be shaving
clubbing all the time liking rymes this G was made 4 raving
loving the scene new dream football went str8 out the window
then from that day on i realy dont know how i learnt 2 flow

this was another talent never stopped pills where gettin popped
week in week out 3 styles flows id composed were gettin dropped
sitting in my bedroom ghetto blaster wiv a built in mic spat at nite
record myself then improve my flow till its soundin so rite n tight

was just doin it 4 fun while i bun then i would go 2 a next rave
realised a few years later on i want mc legend on my grave
got a lucky second chance 2 advance possibly change everythin
pick up pen write again i think its my time 2 shine like bling

this dream is real i can feel so i wont flop il jus have 2 grab it
still smokin takin sum drugs i aint yet kicked that bad habit
3 different styles ahead by miles yea im rite im gona shine
present 100 percent dedication then sign on that dotted line

point that im makin no matter wot this g will never give in
always keepin my head up take wot comes on the chin
rome wasnt built in a day so listen 2 wot i say yea i do pray
life is wot u make it dont ever let ur biggest dreams fade away




sumin true 2 me feedback welcome..safe.

~1~

[Vagina Walls]

Try adding some internals, and putting better vocab in-this will improve your piece.

[G RyMe]

i wrote that in like 10 mins flat,couldnt realy be arsed 2 go in 2 much depth,safe anyways..

[MC_Darkness]

Look AT U HARDCORE RYHMERZ!!!! man, im fourteen, how ya expect me too have a long volcabulary...????

[G RyMe]

if i need 2 get clever wit big words its easy....


exceedingly intricate on idiots G.ryme will always persevere
overexuberent flows i know my conscience stays clear
questioning me this $$$$ will never be argued or debatable
influencial spitboxer staying spraying lay verse fully functional

irrepressable u know u cant control or restrain this G
no ryming partner needed but 1 man solja alliance deadly
excavating a path im making it 2 the top il transcend
with an epitome of lyriks n verses this $$$$ aint gona end

a premonition thats a definition yea u cud say i see the light
crystalising ur balls then goin 2 drop em from a great height
yea u know that im gona be nothing but persistantly tenacious
its the year 2004 now time im getting wickedly atrocious

u can call me spiteful even throw in the word vindictive
but u cannot be looking at me from a different perspective
had enough now my patience of nonsense is jus wearing thin
as 4 imtimidating all these fakes u can jus let me begin



now if u know wot al;l the long words mean ur know it aint jus blah blah,they all link the lines how they should,darkness i was 14 once bruv ive seen ur verses keep droppin,only way 2 elevate...

[e.k.s]

gwan G

[G RyMe]

gwarn eks .......

go on ya msn hun.x

[MC_Darkness]

shizzule...i dont even understand half the words you sed in dat lyric above

[G RyMe]

lol i wouldnt worry bout it 2 much bro,its jus that tubman or wotever started sayin use better vocab etc,i didnt think my 1st verse was needin anythin like that,its a story i aint needin 2 get all complex on it,but im jus showin i can.

safe
~1~

[Vagina Walls]

The rhymes are still simple though.

[G RyMe]

u drop sumin becoz so far from u all ive seen is comments on other ppls.

[Vagina Walls]

Maybe....



..possibly...

[MC_Darkness]

LOL!!!!!!! lets see if you can spit????? anything complex?

[Vagina Walls]

Spit? or do u mean write?

[G RyMe]

well seein as its a thread write but u can spit on the screen if u must.

[Vagina Walls]

^Funny guy.