baby fathers

j-kid1

yh manz is makin a possible mixtape and i wanna hit some real life problems, one of them is baby fathers that think the streets is more important then thur son, this is jus what ive done in bout 45 mins -1 hour and ill post the hole thing up l8r init, tell me what u lot think of it, any critisism acepted but dnt b boi'n it like, hope u enjoy


YH BLAD THIS IS FOR ALL U LAZY-BAS*ARDS
HOO CUDNT B FUKED TO PUT THE RUBBER ON NOW UR BABY-FATHERS
2 AND NOW U DNT CARE UR JUST LAZY-FATHERS
AND I FEEL IT FOR U G*SH HOO HAVE CRAZY-FATHERS
3 HOO WANNA SHIFT THE BLAME ON U AND WUD RATHER RUN-OFF
INTO THE STREETS POPPIN THEM FAKE GUNS-OFF
4 AND DNT SAY IT AINT UR PROBLEM U F*UCKED-HUR
NOW 9 MONTHS OF PAIN ONLY FOR THE DOCTORS TO CUT-HUR
5 BLAD YOU MANZ NEED TO TAKE SOME RESPONSIBILITY
AND DNT CALL HUR THE HOE HERE THAT SHOWS UR INSTABILITY
6 AND TAKE IT SERIOUS BECAUSE IT’S A BIG TING….FERTILITY
AND DNT SAY NAH COZ ANOTHR G*SH IS FEELIN-ME
7 THAT DNT MIND JUST LOOK AFTER YOURE SON
DON’T ACT BIG SAYIN I F*CKED HUR NOW SHE A MUM
8 AND PLEASE MAKE SUTTIN OF URSELF DNT LET UR SON
THINK HIS FATHER IS NUTTIN BUT A LOW-LIFE BUM
9 DINT GET NO GCSE’S SO HE MUGGIN IN ALLEY-WAYS
BEIN THUG ONLY LASTS FOR A LITTLE WHILE THEN IT’S A FASSY-WAY
10 BECAUSE COME ON…35 ROAMIN THE STREETS ACTING HARD
THAT WAS GUD IN UR TEENS BUT DNT U GET JARRED
11 LOOK AFTER UR SON TAKE HIM TO THE PARK
REASSURE HIM THURS NUTTIN TO B SCARED ABOUT THE DARK
12 HELP HIM TO KICK HIS FIRST BALL THEN SCORE HIS FIRST GOAL
HELP HIM TO BECOME WHAT HE WANTS AND ACHIEVE HES LIFE GOALS
13 UR A FATHER NOW SO SET A GUD EXAMPLE SO NO STREET-SLANG
DON’T LET HIM FALL DWN THE THUG WAY HELP HIM BEAT-GANGS
14 SHOW HIM HOW TO AND HOW NOT TO MEET-MANZ
YOU DON’T MEET NEW PEOPLE ONLY WHEN U WANT TO BEEF-THEM
15 TELL HIM TO RESPECT HIS BREDRENS AND NOT TO TEEF-THEM
TEACH HIM THE COMMANDMENTS AND SHOW HIM RESPECT
16 MAKE HIM DO GOOD IN SKOOL UR KIDS GOT PROSPECT
UR SON SHUD BURY U NOT THE OTHER WAY ROUND
17 DROP THE STREET TING U’LL ONLY LUK LIKE A MIDDLE AGED CLOWN
AND WHAT EVA U DO…DO NOT EVA LET HIM DOWN

delight_21

nah that aint good man!! sorry bout tha oppinion boi! but it was ok

delight_21

Tha steetz aint safe,
boys just wanna hit ya in your face
just because you aint from there place
know i now that aint good
but thats how it is in tha hood
bois walk about, in a big crowd
actin, like there so proud, when ya come around
make sure ya look sound an dont cross tha bound
they wear the latest fash, like they gotta lota cash
but if ya $$$$ about, theyll come over you like a rash
snatch away ya stash, then smack ya in the face with quick bash
tha streetz are pretty heavy, ya gotta keep it steady
act like ya ready cos yall get $$$$ed quicker than ya can drink brandy
an tha streets are pretty handy an girls just wanna get randy
boys representin, so who you presentin, are we recommendin
when ya come down my endz, do we rocomendz?
i dont now it just dependz, are ya chav or do ya pretendz?

j-kid1

yh yh safe for the feedback manz dnt really do these kind of chats, my first time see i usually use merkage bars but safe for it anyway

lady_lyrical_00

ight,,, this was a good issue to put forward but i think u wud gain more creativity n stuff if u tryed usin bigger words and play around a lil with different rhyme styles etc.
the rap could have also been set of a lil neater too

overall,,, gd stff keep elevatin ,

j-kid1

dnt worry im the man for bigger words but i thought id keep it more simple coz ppl wud jus think ur readin out of a dictionary if u kno what i mean

lady_lyrical_00

lol yer tru .. but a few big ones in ther dont bite lol

j-kid1

well i tried words like responsibility instability fertility etc. but talkin about real life things is'nt a gud luk on me maybe i shud keep to the merkage bars