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    Hi, would you rate my lyrics please?

    Hi, I've written 3 songs, and was wondering if you'd let me know what you think! Be honest, thanks

    1. I STILL LOVE YOU

    You walked away, yesterday,
    All alone, I am today
    I let you in, I shared your soul
    You broke my heart, you took your toll

    PRE-CHORUS
    You’re on my mind, all the time
    I wish i could give you a sign...

    CHORUS
    That I still love you
    I still love you
    I should have told you every day,
    I wish the pain would go away,
    Cause I still love you...

    I tried to call you on your phone,
    I’m sick of being all alone,
    I was complete, You were my life,
    I wanted you to be my wife

    PRE-CHORUS
    CHORUS

    It’s in the past, now you’ve moved on
    There one day, next you’ve gone
    You said some things, it meant nothing,
    I’d just bought you a diamond ring,
    taught a mockingbird to sing,
    i took you under my wing

    felt like a piece that didn’t fit,
    you once told me that I had lit
    up the candle of your heart
    now i can’t escape the dark
    you’re putting me through hell
    all that’s left’s an empty shell

    PRECHORUS
    CHORUS x2
    I still love you, I still love you,
    Do you love me?, Do you love me?,
    You don’t love me, You don’t love me,
    You never loved me, You never loved me,
    But I still love you, I still love you,
    I still love you, I still love you,

    2. FRIEND-ZONE

    You asked me what was wrong
    I’m gazing in your eyes
    “I love you with my heart, my soul and mind”
    Heart racing, butterflies

    I’m falling deeper in love,
    Deeper in love,
    Deeper in love,
    With you

    I thought that you were made for me
    I’d be with you until the end
    With those few words you broke my heart
    When you said “let’s just be friends”

    I told you of my love for you
    She takes my hands from her hips
    You look down towards the floor
    The smile faded from your lips

    You’re speaking with a cold, blank stare
    You walk away, and I’m alone
    Your words stuck in my mind
    Forever stuck in the friend-zone

    I’m falling deeper in love,
    Deeper in love,
    Deeper in love,
    With you

    I thought that you were made for me
    I’d be with you until the end
    With those few words you broke my heart
    When you said “let’s just be friends”

    You were one of my best friends,
    Our memories a distant thought,
    I loved you with my heart, soul and mind,
    The times we shared are all I’ve got,

    You’re on my mind every day
    And I still see you in my dreams
    You may not be perfect, baby
    But you’re perfect for me

    I’m falling deeper in love,
    Deeper in love,
    Deeper in love,
    With you
    You’re on my mind every day
    And I still see you in my dreams
    You may not be perfect, baby
    But you’re perfect for me

    3. BALLAD OF THE BROKEN HEART
    You were my soul
    You were my life
    You’re cutting me
    Like a knife

    I thought that I had seen the light
    Holding on to you so tight
    I wish that you’d come back to me
    I was blind, but now I see

    I wish that I had seen the signs
    Before your hand slipped from mines
    My heart is breaking everyday
    Wishing my pain away

    You said I meant
    Nothing to you
    But since you’ve gone
    My heart’s in two

    When you’re around, my nerves were shot
    From the start your love I’ve sought
    At the start I was so shy
    Without your love I thought I’d die
    When I asked you to be mine
    I never thought I’d crossed the line

    I thought that I had seen the light
    Holding on to you so tight
    I wish that you’d come back to me
    I was blind, but now I see

    I wish that I had seen the signs
    Before your hand slipped from mines
    My heart is breaking everyday
    Wishing my pain away

    I wish you would
    Walk through my door
    And things would be
    As they were before

    I thought that I had seen the light
    Holding on to you so tight
    I wish that you’d come back to me
    I was blind, but now I see

    I wish that I had seen the signs
    Before your hand slipped from mines
    My heart is breaking everyday
    Wishing my pain away

    Thanks!

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    Cool lyrics, interesting song structure on some of them like 3 verses then a chorus. Would be good to hear it with some music. Have you got any backing music to put them to?

    All our links are under our logo. Our Facebook is good for your free promotion if you want to get your music and lyrics out there a little.

    Looking forward to hearing the songs. When do you think you'll have them ready?


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